This Excerpt was provided by NetGalley in exchange for an honest Review
Alright so this is another one of those fancy preview excerpts. I grabbed this one on Netgalley because the blurb seemed interesting.
“Mystic is the start of an enchanting new epic fantasy series from Jason Denzel, the founder of Dragonmount.
I called to the Myst, and it sent us you.
For hundreds of years, high-born nobles have competed for the chance to learn of the Myst. Powerful, revered, and often reclusive, Mystics have the unique ability to summon and manipulate the Myst: the underlying energy that lives at the heart of the universe. Once in a very great while, they take an apprentice, always from the most privileged sects of society. Such has always been the tradition-until a new High Mystic takes her seat and chooses Pomella AnDone, a restless, low-born teenager, as a candidate.
Commoners have never been welcomed among the select few given the opportunity to rise beyond even the highest nobility. So when Pomella chooses to accept the summons and journey to Kelt Apar, she knows that she will have more to contend with than the competition for the apprenticeship.
Breaking both law and tradition, Pomella undergoes three trials against the other candidates to prove her worthiness. As the trials unfold, Pomella navigates a deadly world of intolerance and betrayal, unaware that ruthless conspirators intend to make her suffer for having the audacity to seek to unravel the secrets of the Myst.”
So lets discuss this preview. It was about 92 pages long, and covered the first several chapters. This is the story of Pomella, a young girl who is sixteen years old living in the small village of Oakspring. It starts with her storming out of her home after an argument with her father regarding the length of her hair. Apparently in this world hair length denotes your class, with Nobles being allowed long hair and Commoners only allowed short maybe shoulder length at most.
She runs off into the woods, collects some laundry, and then heads back into the village for their yearly festival. At this festival is the daughter of the local lord, a girl named Elona, who performs in their yearly play. Elona, being a noble, has some talent it seems in controlling the Myst, this energy that is never really explained fully but is implied to be magic and the stuff of life.
The people who can manipulate this Myst are called Mystics. They stand above Nobels in rank and are considered wise peoples and sages by most folks.
Some events take place during this festival and Pomella is summoned by the new High Mystic herself to compete for a chance to become the High Mystic’s apprentice. This angers Elona who cannot believe a commoner could be chosen, and decrees that should Pomella leave the village or barony should would become Unclaimed, stripped of all identify and life.
From there, Pomella begins her adventure.
I really dont want to give too much away. In all honesty when I first started reading, and until the major event that occurs which triggers Pomella’s journey, I was unimpressed. Most of the beginning pages are focused on Pomella and her getting ready for this festival, including her fretting over a boy named Sim, who does feature more in the later parts of the excerpt.
Its obvious from the get-go that Sim and Pomella are going to be our young romance here, simply based on the way everything is written. This is not a bad thing, but its telegraphed pretty early. Pomella is our fiery heroine, and Sim is the stoic and trustworthy love interest.
I will admit that after reading the excerpt I am happy to say I am very intrigued by the premise. The beings introduced later, including an encounter with some Unclaimed (who apparently are bald, thus cementing my thought that hair is a big status symbol here) piqued my interest.
Now there is something that bothers me about the writing style here. And its a personal pet peeve and may not bother others but it bothered me enough that I feel the need to mention it.
If, as a fantasy author, you are going to create words to describe things the please for the love of god please make then unique! Spring and Summer in this universe are Springrise and Summeryarn, for example. But the biggest ones that stuck out to me are Mahthir and Fathir. Now, if you read those and sound them out you will know exactly what they stand for. Mother, and Father. Why change the spelling of the words when, phonetically, they are the same? I have never understood doing that. He even changes the word twerp to twerper for some reason. Its just strange.
But again, thats a personal pet peeve and I am willing to overlook it because the world this preview paints is something I am very curious of. At one point there are hints of an even larger world outside Moth, which I assume from the sound of the it is in fact an island of some sort.
Mystic comes out on 11/3/15.